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		<title>Comment on Comment Policy by Yes, the launch of the forum is not a mirage! &#8211; MorganWick.com</title>
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		<dc:creator>Yes, the launch of the forum is not a mirage! &#8211; MorganWick.com</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 01 Feb 2012 10:58:53 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>[...] The Complete Original SeriesMy Ongoing Book Wish ListThe Median Expected ScoreDa Countdown PageComment Policy     &#171; An Early-Week Super Bowl [...]</description>
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		<title>Comment on The Median Expected Score by An Early-Week Super Bowl Preview &#8211; MorganWick.com</title>
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		<dc:creator>An Early-Week Super Bowl Preview &#8211; MorganWick.com</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 31 Jan 2012 06:34:43 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>[...] IndexWebcomics&#8217; Identity Crisis &#8211; The Complete Original SeriesMy Ongoing Book Wish ListThe Median Expected ScoreDa Countdown Page     &#171; Quick sports graphics [...]</description>
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		<title>Comment on Predictions for the Pro Football Hall of Fame Class of 2012 by David</title>
		<link>http://sports.morganwick.com/2012/01/predictions-for-the-pro-football-hall-of-fame-class-of-2012/comment-page-1/#comment-38613</link>
		<dc:creator>David</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sun, 29 Jan 2012 10:21:14 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Cris Carter DESTORYS Andre Reed in virtually every stat. Carter should have been in there years ago</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Cris Carter DESTORYS Andre Reed in virtually every stat. Carter should have been in there years ago</p>
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		<title>Comment on Also, contribute to Rich&#8217;s Kickstarter drive, and hasten the day I get any collections of the online comics other than the first. If I had money, I&#8217;d contribute just to get the bonus story. by Math_Mage</title>
		<link>http://webcomics.morganwick.com/2012/01/also-contribute-to-richs-kickstarter-drive-and-hasten-the-day-i-get-any-collections-of-the-online-comics-other-than-the-first-if-i-had-money-id-contribute-just-to-get-the-bonus-story/comment-page-1/#comment-38045</link>
		<dc:creator>Math_Mage</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 25 Jan 2012 06:14:11 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I don&#039;t think Redcloak has any plans to get into an all-out war with Xykon over Gobbotopia. Nor do I think he will successfully cow Xykon with a threat to his phylactery, considering how well that worked last time. Redcloak&#039;s pretense at control over the situation does not make him any less a pawn batted forth between Xykon and the Dark One than he was at the end of SoD. And Redcloak&#039;s willingness to kill Tsukiko in no way implies that he&#039;s ready to antagonize Xykon or abandon Gobbotopia--he&#039;s doing damage control on both counts by eliminating her from the picture.

On a writing note, it was a little difficult to keep track of your post because it meandered so much. You also need to keep the verbosity to a minimum with some ruthless editing. Your post had the feel of someone who spills all his undirected thoughts onto the page because he isn&#039;t sure what he wants to say. That&#039;s fine when you&#039;re brainstorming, but once you have your ideas written down, you need to iteratively condense and reorganize them, piecing the ideas together in such a way that the transitions are natural and each piece supports the overarching structure.

For example, at the end of your first major paragraph, which is where you should lay out the structure of your post, you raise the question of whether we need to reinterpret the events at the end of SoD. Then you muddle around for two paragraphs with one sentence devoted to what actually happened at the end of SoD. Then you explicitly break away to discuss something else entirely. Two paragraphs later you come back to the topic, reaching a tentative conclusion that vaguely agrees with your earlier comments, but doesn&#039;t actually account for them. In the entire post, you never attempted to present the standard interpretation of the end of SoD, let alone a reinterpretation. You have a lot of material to work with on this point, but you never organized it into a coherent analysis. Something along the lines of...
-Brief summary of end of SoD
-Standard conclusion about Redcloak drawn from end of SoD
-What about the events in the latest comic(s) casts doubt on that conclusion
-What alternative conclusion those events support
-How well that conclusion fits into the rest of the narrative

...would have communicated a lot more to the reader, and provided a reasonable grounding to talk about Redcloak&#039;s tragic devotion to the Dark One, or to speculate about how Redcloak intends to handle Xykon after recent events. Without that grounding, the rest of your post felt sort of pie-in-the-sky.

Also, run-on sentences lead to rambling, undirected writing--after all, they&#039;re the product of rambling, undirected thinking. It&#039;s a symptom rather than the problem, but disciplining yourself to write separate concise sentences that work together will help you to put your separate thoughts together in a way that flows.

Hope that helps.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I don&#8217;t think Redcloak has any plans to get into an all-out war with Xykon over Gobbotopia. Nor do I think he will successfully cow Xykon with a threat to his phylactery, considering how well that worked last time. Redcloak&#8217;s pretense at control over the situation does not make him any less a pawn batted forth between Xykon and the Dark One than he was at the end of SoD. And Redcloak&#8217;s willingness to kill Tsukiko in no way implies that he&#8217;s ready to antagonize Xykon or abandon Gobbotopia&#8211;he&#8217;s doing damage control on both counts by eliminating her from the picture.</p>
<p>On a writing note, it was a little difficult to keep track of your post because it meandered so much. You also need to keep the verbosity to a minimum with some ruthless editing. Your post had the feel of someone who spills all his undirected thoughts onto the page because he isn&#8217;t sure what he wants to say. That&#8217;s fine when you&#8217;re brainstorming, but once you have your ideas written down, you need to iteratively condense and reorganize them, piecing the ideas together in such a way that the transitions are natural and each piece supports the overarching structure.</p>
<p>For example, at the end of your first major paragraph, which is where you should lay out the structure of your post, you raise the question of whether we need to reinterpret the events at the end of SoD. Then you muddle around for two paragraphs with one sentence devoted to what actually happened at the end of SoD. Then you explicitly break away to discuss something else entirely. Two paragraphs later you come back to the topic, reaching a tentative conclusion that vaguely agrees with your earlier comments, but doesn&#8217;t actually account for them. In the entire post, you never attempted to present the standard interpretation of the end of SoD, let alone a reinterpretation. You have a lot of material to work with on this point, but you never organized it into a coherent analysis. Something along the lines of&#8230;<br />
-Brief summary of end of SoD<br />
-Standard conclusion about Redcloak drawn from end of SoD<br />
-What about the events in the latest comic(s) casts doubt on that conclusion<br />
-What alternative conclusion those events support<br />
-How well that conclusion fits into the rest of the narrative</p>
<p>&#8230;would have communicated a lot more to the reader, and provided a reasonable grounding to talk about Redcloak&#8217;s tragic devotion to the Dark One, or to speculate about how Redcloak intends to handle Xykon after recent events. Without that grounding, the rest of your post felt sort of pie-in-the-sky.</p>
<p>Also, run-on sentences lead to rambling, undirected writing&#8211;after all, they&#8217;re the product of rambling, undirected thinking. It&#8217;s a symptom rather than the problem, but disciplining yourself to write separate concise sentences that work together will help you to put your separate thoughts together in a way that flows.</p>
<p>Hope that helps.</p>
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		<title>Comment on Rating the Super Bowl Logos: Part IX by Morgan Wick</title>
		<link>http://sports.morganwick.com/2011/01/rating-the-super-bowl-logos-part-ix/comment-page-1/#comment-35970</link>
		<dc:creator>Morgan Wick</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sun, 08 Jan 2012 10:07:30 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Okay...? Is there anything in particular you&#039;re basing that off of? I&#039;m looking at the previous part and I gave pretty good grades to two simple logos (XXXVIII and XL). If I give better grades to &quot;cluttered and ridiculous&quot; logos, it&#039;s only because the Super Bowl logo used to be all about being as flamboyant as possible, so that&#039;s part of what makes a good Super Bowl logo. Would I choose, say, the XXVII logo as the logo for a company? Hell no. Also, why are you commenting on year-old posts?</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Okay&#8230;? Is there anything in particular you&#8217;re basing that off of? I&#8217;m looking at the previous part and I gave pretty good grades to two simple logos (XXXVIII and XL). If I give better grades to &#8220;cluttered and ridiculous&#8221; logos, it&#8217;s only because the Super Bowl logo used to be all about being as flamboyant as possible, so that&#8217;s part of what makes a good Super Bowl logo. Would I choose, say, the XXVII logo as the logo for a company? Hell no. Also, why are you commenting on year-old posts?</p>
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		<title>Comment on Rating the Super Bowl Logos: Part IX by KB</title>
		<link>http://sports.morganwick.com/2011/01/rating-the-super-bowl-logos-part-ix/comment-page-1/#comment-35910</link>
		<dc:creator>KB</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sun, 08 Jan 2012 01:40:15 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I sure hope you aren&#039;t a graphic designer. Most of this is just opinion of course, but my god, if you design logos for people, they probably end up with something so cluttered and ridiculous, they&#039;d have no choice but to laugh!</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I sure hope you aren&#8217;t a graphic designer. Most of this is just opinion of course, but my god, if you design logos for people, they probably end up with something so cluttered and ridiculous, they&#8217;d have no choice but to laugh!</p>
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		<title>Comment on To be honest? The only reason I&#8217;m reviewing this comic at all is to continue a new streak of posts every weekday. by Matthew I</title>
		<link>http://webcomics.morganwick.com/2011/12/to-be-honest-the-only-reason-im-reviewing-this-comic-at-all-is-to-continue-a-new-streak-of-posts-every-weekday/comment-page-1/#comment-34074</link>
		<dc:creator>Matthew I</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 29 Dec 2011 10:05:52 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Since the fact that you posted it at all means you have at least SOME interest in what happened, I&#039;m just going to leave this here:
http://ingame.msnbc.msn.com/_news/2011/12/27/9745218-jilted-gamer-teaches-vendor-price-of-rudeness</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Since the fact that you posted it at all means you have at least SOME interest in what happened, I&#8217;m just going to leave this here:<br />
<a href="http://ingame.msnbc.msn.com/_news/2011/12/27/9745218-jilted-gamer-teaches-vendor-price-of-rudeness" rel="nofollow">http://ingame.msnbc.msn.com/_news/2011/12/27/9745218-jilted-gamer-teaches-vendor-price-of-rudeness</a></p>
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		<title>Comment on And an indifferent blog-day. by We gon&#8217; party like it&#8217;s your blog-day. &#8211; MorganWick.com</title>
		<link>http://www.morganwick.com/2010/12/and-an-indifferent-blog-day/comment-page-1/#comment-32802</link>
		<dc:creator>We gon&#8217; party like it&#8217;s your blog-day. &#8211; MorganWick.com</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 22 Dec 2011 22:16:15 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>[...] has it been a wild, up-and-down Year Five in the history of Da Blog. One year ago at this time, Da Blog had hit a low point, with me writing the annual blog-day post in similar conditions to [...]</description>
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		<title>Comment on Da Countdown Page by It&#8217;s the final countdown! Do-do-do-do! &#8211; MorganWick.com</title>
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		<dc:creator>It&#8217;s the final countdown! Do-do-do-do! &#8211; MorganWick.com</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Mon, 19 Dec 2011 22:20:50 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>[...] to content About meAdvertising FAQMy Ongoing Book Wish ListDa Countdown Page     &#171; 2011 College Football Rankings &#8211; Week [...]</description>
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		<title>Comment on Update on the below &quot;Update&quot; by Reflecting on the end of one of the defining elements of my life &#8211; MorganWick.com</title>
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		<dc:creator>Reflecting on the end of one of the defining elements of my life &#8211; MorganWick.com</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 26 Oct 2011 01:08:23 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>[...] discovered who I was and what I wanted to be. For a time I moved out and lived in a dorm room, but it was not meant to be, and after a few months I was back at the house where I started, where Da Blog became what it is [...]</description>
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